Tuesday, March 31, 2009

Fullmoon

Sweats pour down his back. He's running fast. As fast as he can. Everything he sees is blurry like a quick flash of images. He's breathing hard.. His muscles ache from all the running but he doesn't care. He looks up to the sky, "it's almost time" he says-no,he growls. He runs faster,he has to make it to the cornfield or else.



The small hut in the middle of the cornfield is almost upon his reach when he suddenly hears a woman's voice calling him from behind. He looks back and he sees a beautiful woman indeed. "U know her,Jani!",a voice inside his head screams and it rang loudly in his mind and ears. He puts his hands to his ears,a fail attempt to shut the voice, and runs towards the hut."I don't know her!","who's Jani?!", he thinks.



He slams the door and locks it. "Its not enough", he thinks. But the time is running out so he has no choice but to pray that the door can lasts through the night. The burning sensation in his stomach increases. He tries to endure the pain but to no avail. He screams in pain. At the same time he feels his fingers grows slightly bigger and harrier. He tries so hard not to lose his mind. "You know her,Jani!" again the voice repeats itself. Two large fangs grow and with the last bit of his conscious mind he sees another flash of an image. A woman-black hair with a pair of blue eyes. She is dressed in the whitest silver and she is smiling at him. Again the voice "U know her,Jani!".


He is screaming again-no,he is howling now. A voice behind the door, "Jani love,open this door please. We'll go through this together.Please Jani!" the voice pleads. But he is no longer Jani. He's a beast now. A beast ready to kill anyone he has set his eyes on. With one final screams,the transformation completes. Jani-the beast- gazes around with its yellow,large eyes. Someone is pounding the door. "Jani, are you ok? It's me,Dana. It's ok love..It's all over now.." the voice behind the door says.
"Oh,it is far from over" the beast gives a sick,wicked laugh. Then it runs swifly towards the door. The smell of blood is in the air and it can sense it. And the last thing it sees is the horror filled face of a woman. Everything goes black after that...


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Jani's body trembles with fear and sadness. Tears flow from his eyes. A lifeless body of a woman lies in front of him. "Im sorry..Im sorry" that is all that he can utter. He has once again killed his lover. He cannot take it anymore. He does not want to kill anymore. Or worse,kill another woman he loves. The curse is unbearable. He has to stop it now. With tears,he gazes around the hut. His gaze settles on a mirror. He sees a man covered with blood starring back at him and at that moment his mind is set. He walks out of the hut and goes back to his house at the far end of the village. Anyone who sees him screams in terror and runs away. As he reaches his house, he goes to kitchen-still in tears- and takes a knife. He puts the knife to his neck and then he sees it again-the image- that same black haired woman is smiling at him. And he remembers now..She was his first lover...also his first victim as a werewolf. He gives a small smile and says slowly "im coming now,Catherine..". Then he slits his throat and blood rushes out rapidly from his veins.....


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So i was inspired to write this story after listening to Sonata Arctica-Fullmoon and Metallica-Of wolf and man.And also by the story Sendoh sent me. Even though my english is not so good, I hope u guys can give some comments :)

Oh,and please5 tell me if theres any error with my grammar. Thanks :D

7 comments:

  1. Mula2 baca igt kan apa bende ni?? XDD rupa2 nya fiction..

    Hm..actually when writing a story, you have to use past tense, but I think I can let it slide for this one. And, every time ada..ala, wat's dat call?? Yg cam buka kata or nak start conversation ke apa, kene start ngan capital letter first. Even when the character was thinking or talking with himself inside his mind, you have to do the same and put the conversational symbols as well, xyah guna dash.

    For someone who thinks her english's not good, I think your writing's great! Maybe better than mine, because mine macam tah pape 8D. Great attempt, gurl!

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  2. ko wat sndiri..?, Best gak cite nei

    keep it up

    AAAaaaaaUUUuuuuuuuu!!!(howling)

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  3. Yes, usually for fiction, the past tense is used. Ade skali tuh TK try2 guna present tense sampai melalut sket psl hd biase ngan past tense. And if you used present tense, there's a tendency of getting confused, like for some stuff, if writing in present, kena guna past tense jugak. These things are kinda hard to spot...

    And yea, there are a few of 'em where you mixed your tenses.

    But~ overall a...gruesome story. o__olll

    XD

    Ah. And of course, punctuation. ;)

    ... =..=ll Eza...I haven't been writing gak...wuhu dah berkarat. lololol

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  4. Thnks for the tips guys.
    Appreciate it! :)

    Ni first attempt cuba present tense gak XD

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  5. this blog is almost the same as my essay i gave it to my teacher Pn.KB last year...

    tiru eh?? kantoi hahahaha

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